Writing task 2 – people are having more and more sugar-based drinks – bài mẫu band 8
Người viết: thầy Cao Bách (IELTS 8.0)
Topic
People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less?
Bài hoàn chỉnh
In recent years, an enormous volume of sugar-based drinks has been consumed worldwide. This has caused health officials to issue warnings regarding the adverse effects of sugary drinks on people’s health. Experts have argued that aggressive marketing and lack of effective governance are the main causes, prompting the government to implement media restrictions and tight control to make people consume less sugary drinks.
To gain more profit, corporations have invented ingenious means to advertise sugary drinks to the populace: celebrity appearances, sports sponsorships, showcase events and even scholarships. High exposure to messages that encourage consumption leads to a high likelihood that people will buy sugary beverages. It is estimated that in 2018, Suntory Pepsico, a major beverage company, spent approximately one billion USD on marketing campaigns in South East Asia alone, resulting in 100,00,000 bottles of their signature juice being bought. To mitigate such advertisements, some countries have imposed restrictions on media contents, such as less than 10 seconds of food videos on national channels or ban soft drinks promotions entirely.
Government officials often ignore regulating consumption. Many powerful lawmakers are influenced by companies to allow low taxes on unhealthy beverages. Taxes on sugar-based drinks in many countries are significantly lower than other consumer goods and have not increased for the past decade. It is suggested that there should be strict control or even higher tax on drinks to increase price, subsequently reducing consumption.
In conclusion, corporate greed and inadequate regulations all contribute to sweetened beverages consumptions. To prevent long-term effects on health, decisive actions should be taken to restrict media, increase tax and impose laws on these products.
271 words – 40 mins
Word list
- enormous (adj): to lớn, khổng lồ
- consume (v): tiêu thụ
- adverse (adj): có hại
- implement (v): thực hiện
- restriction (n): (sự) hạn chế, giới hạn
- restrict (v): hạn chế, giới hạn
- ingenious (adj): khéo léo
- likelihood (n): (sự) có khả năng
- mitigate (v): giảm nhẹ, giảm thiểu
- impose (v): áp đặt
- lawmaker (n): nhà lập pháp
- decisive (adj): dứt khoát, kiên quyết
Bài này đã được Mr. Bách nhờ Ex-examiner chấm với các tiêu chí đạt điểm như sau:
| Task achievement | Cohesion & Coherence | Lexical range | Grammar |
| 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 |
